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Post by nikeajax on Apr 14, 2024 12:49:25 GMT -8
Fred, I do remember Kenny Roberts, he raced for Yamaha, and road an RD-350, 400 too, they looked identical, so my brother rebadged his 400 to 350, and would race people and they'd get a nasty surprise DRW, this is the guy I remember as the classic British, well, Scottish actually, racing driver, Jackie Stewart: Jackie is still with us too! He worked for ABC Sports (American Broadcasting Corporation) I used to work with a Scottish woman, and she'd always say, "It's a great, great day for motorcar racing!" So my wife and I will say it too in a Scots accent when ever someone mentions racing. John, I'm glad you're getting good feedback, it must feel exciting JB
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Post by vance on Apr 14, 2024 15:39:21 GMT -8
In my book, I wrote the following: Well, my Beta Reader, Pam Powell, put a question mark when I mentioned "Mike Nelson." So I decided I needed to write a footnote for those who did not live through the TV era of the mid-1960s. Here's what I wrote: I didn't realize that I had outlived the Sea Hunt era. John I always put my mask up on the surface. Why not? The naysayers are full of it. Just put a lanyard on it. It won't get lost then.... And yes, I object to it being considered an indicator of "diver in distress".
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Post by SeaRat on Apr 14, 2024 21:37:32 GMT -8
Vance, I almost never put my mask on my forehead; that training took. If we were caught with that mask on our forehead, it was an automatic 25 pushups with our twin aluminum military 90 cubic foot tanks on our back. I usually wear a helmet when diving, and keep my mask on my face while exiting. Once out, it is completely off my head, and on a carrying strap on my Para-Sea BC. JB, Yes, I’m getting really good feedback from Pam. I had a full paragraph on how we used a Navy wrist compass for our swims, and she said that I completely lost her in my description of how we swam in a straight line using the compass. Here’s my edits: Original text: Here is the edited text: I found a similar compass on EBay, and copied an image from the post: www.ebay.com/itm/235509187947?itmmeta=01HVG3EMFY8P56VGY5R0RMP8NW&hash=item36d571056b:g:RBQAAOSwzUdkatzi&itmprp=enc%3AAQAJAAAA8JxLjo4mUE62PzhP50NA1mGB7NfZ6%2Ba5IcOtkDleYwFGpm4BjDCgHOMzKYLnIN%2BOM4oWgqEjZHBsP%2Fsy%2BS%2F2EJxoSw1G8TxtlFmLveWfFn1TWCZF%2B4CbrcrUKt0%2FsySOt5Vt%2BF5cN3Y1CMiczB82OE1uoq5V5c7y2WIkkM9M5sRza9%2B5V8eLvzIR1Y6%2BMihX5hTgh89u6H12y4k7gKSzLAkLdPEZo3NStUbA1vjlLhnWdS4Va6mzUs6jyKg8xh%2BethhdbCXopgWTTTPnNVekKWyU%2FZ8L1ZTfV3vjy0UNi%2BRHALLNARu7DgqVVW9fl3p7lw%3D%3D%7Ctkp%3ABFBMhMi6g9xjJohn PS, I got the second photo of the compass. Also, my edits don’t come through when I copied the text, so I have included the original text and the edited text.
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Post by SeaRat on Apr 24, 2024 17:25:33 GMT -8
Well, Pam gave me another short critique, this time of the last of the U.S. Navy Underwater Swimmers School and then at Fairchild Air Force Base, for Global Survival School. Here's a couple of examples of her critique work:
Pam wrote:
In Global Survival School, I wrote:
Pam wrote a comment:
So I'm continueing to work on this book as the critiques come in.
John
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